薄冰语法上写 one day,an old woman went into a shop with her grandson.一天一位老妇带着进了一家商店

薄冰语法上写 one day,an old woman went into a shop with her grandson.一天一位老妇带着进了一家商店
按字面直译 一天,一位老太太走进一家商店与她的孙子. 如果我把他译成one day,an old woman with her grand son went into a shop.一天一位老妇带着进了一家商店 这样不是更容易明白?这样符合英语语法?如果不对请说明.谢谢