请哪位老师帮改一下英语作文,十分感谢!

请哪位老师帮改一下英语作文,十分感谢!
Nowadays, it is a common phenomenon that more and more high school students open their own blogs on the Internet. On the one hand, blogs can be the windows for students to show theirselves to others. It’s also a good way to relax theirselves from the pressure of study. However, on the other hand, many parents and teachers think it is a waste of time and energy to manage a blogs. It will delay the study of students. In my opinion, It is a good way to show oneself. The opening of students’ blogs can help the owners have more confidence. The blogs without the influence of students’ Study should be encouraged.
英语人气:612 ℃时间:2020-01-27 07:56:45
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本人英语一般,但还是进来看了看.
我感觉写的蛮好的.
说点我的感想哈.第一呢,delay 你是想表达耽误学生学习么?我感觉这词不是很适合.
第二,好像句子都是很简单的结构.最后,有关于你自己的opinion,我看着有点牵强,说服读者很难.
加油.“耽误学习”好像有这种表达方式啊,准确的应该是什么呢?问了些同学,她们说可以用这种表达,嘿嘿。influence 也可以。可能我思维定势了。你写的不错了。加油。
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