请某位英语老师评价一下我的英语作文

请某位英语老师评价一下我的英语作文
On life,childrens should respct parents.And help parents do mang things.Because they are very hard.They often take good care of our.They are very responsible .We shouldn't demand too much.Therefore we should help they do mang things.We should washing up our clothes.And keep our room clean .Give they a little thoublesome things.Because we are grow up.